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12-17 years old children.

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Young kids, they are really weak at some viruses.
Some kids get the big sick from virus and then it is so dangerous.
Because young kids it can be die.
But 12-17 years old children there are have enough of immunity.
So I think they don't need got the vaccine essential.

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Hi Ann:)

The Centers for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC) now recommends a COVID-19 vaccine for children ages 5 and older. 

They can protect kids from getting infected with the coronavirus that causes COVID-19. Vaccines are now available for adults and all children ages 5 and older. Everyone who is eligible should get vaccinated as soon as possible.

Occasionally, a vaccinated person may get infected with the virus or even get mild symptoms. This is called a "breakthrough infection." But the vaccine is very good at preventing serious illness, hospitalization, and death due to COVID-19.

Despite that, it's still a personal choice. Although doctors still highly recommends it. 

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Young kids, they are really weak at some viruses.
>> Young kid are weak against viruses. 

Some kids get the big sick from virus and then it is so dangerous.
>> Some kids get really sick because of it. 

Because young kids it can be die.
>> It can sometime be very fatal for them. 

But 12-17 years old children there are have enough of immunity.
>> Although, children who are 12-17 years old have enough immunity. 

So I think they don't need got the vaccine essential.
>> So I think that it is not essential for them to get vaccinated. 
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