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Do less serious annoyances have a habit of ruining your day or are you able to get over them quickly?

--> I think I can get over less serious annoyances quickly. Ruining the day with minor annoyance can cause great damage of that day.
Therefore, it is better to act while thinking about what thoughts or attitudes can help me for a better day.

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Hi there Bo Im!

This is a good way to have a great day. Petty things, we have to let go of them as they ruin our composure and distract us from what needs to be done. 

All of your sentences are perfect and the choices of words as perfectly fit for the idea. Excellent job!

See you next week!

-T. Donna =)

I think I can get over less serious annoyances quickly. 
>> Correct!

Ruining the day with minor annoyance can cause great damage of that day.
>> Correct!
 
Therefore, it is better to act while thinking about what thoughts or attitudes can help me for a better day.
>> Correct!
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