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What career opportunities are there for the younger generation in your country?

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First, there are a lot of majors in a university, so we can learn various knowledge.
Second, in elementary school and middle school, students learn about many careers.
So studnets can have the chance to learn more careers.
Third, there are various systems that help young generation can get their job.
I don't know about the systems exactly, but the goverment is helping them.
So I think in South Korea, we can have great chance to get our careers.

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Hi John :)

Your country really is dedicated to education. The young generation would benefit from it a lot. Thanks for sharing. :) 

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First, there are a lot of majors in a university, so we can learn various knowledge.
>> First, there are a lot of majors in a university so we can learn various knowledge.

Second, in elementary school and middle school, students learn about many careers.
>> Second, in elementary and middle school, students learn about many careers.

So studnets can have the chance to learn more careers.
>>  This is how students have the chance to learn more about careers. 

Third, there are various systems that help young generation can get their job.
>> Third, there are various systems that help young generation get jobs. 

I don't know about the systems exactly, but the goverment is helping them.
>> I don't know about the systems exactly, but the government helps them. 

So I think in South Korea, we can have great chance to get our careers.
>>So I think in South Korea, we have a great chance to pursue our careers. 

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