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Sermon 3

작성자: 류*선
2021-11-13 735

회원님의 영작문

By his sacrifice, he did everything that needed to be done for everyone.
Now whoever believes and trusts in Him is purified and washed away. Once we have a relationship with God, we are able to enjoy life for eternity for God is eternal and everlasting. It means we all are saved through our Lord, Jesus. As Jesus Christ died on the cross and rose from the grave, we are able to experience the power of resurrection here and now. And beyond our death.
What we need to do is to keep our eyes on Jesus. This is the answer to our lives for a life of eternity. Every beginning has an end. It means life has an end too. We all will experience and end on the earth. But Our God is life. We believe that our God is God of the living. God doesn’t want us to die. Rather, God wants us to live eterna life. Thus God sent his Son Jesus Christ for us to save. Whoever believes in Jesus’ atonement they are saved. This is salvation. We all see each other from eternity to eternity at our home.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Amen and amen to that, Han! Have an enjoyable worship this Sunday with your immediate family and church family!-Faith-
By his sacrifice, he did everything that needed to be done for everyone.
>> CORRECT
Now whoever believes and trusts in Him is purified and washed away. 
>> Now whoever believes and trusts in Him is purified and washed. 
Once we have a relationship with God, we are able to enjoy life for eternity for God is eternal and everlasting. 
>> CORRECT
It means we all are saved through our Lord, Jesus. 
>> CORRECT
As Jesus Christ died on the cross and rose from the grave, we are able to experience the power of resurrection here and now. And beyond our death.
>> As Jesus Christ died on the cross and rose from the grave, we are able to experience the power of resurrection here and now and beyond our death.
What we need to do is to keep our eyes on Jesus. 
>> CORRECT
This is the answer to our lives for a life of eternity. 
>> CORRECT 
Every beginning has an end. 
>> CORRECT
It means life has an end too. 
>> CORRECT
We all will experience and end on the earth. 
>> We all experience life and the end of it on earth. 
But Our God is life.
>> CORRECT 
We believe that our God is God of the living. 
>> CORRECT 
God doesn’t want us to die. 
>> CORRECT 
Rather, God wants us to live eterna life. 
>> Rather, God wants us to live an eternal life. 
Thus God sent his Son Jesus Christ for us to save. 
>> Thus, God sent his Son Jesus Christ for us to be saved. 
Whoever believes in Jesus’ atonement they are saved. 
>> Whoever believes in Jesus’ atonement, they are saved. 
This is salvation. 
>> CORRECT 
We all see each other from eternity to eternity at our home.
> We will all see each other from eternity to eternity at our true home.
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