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I don't like the way handle to accidents like this of president Moon.
Whenever big accidents or incidents occur in Korea, hr always instructed to make relevant laws or revise the provisions.
Utill now, it has been proved that his orders are useless or impractical.
They around him do only working on the table, having vain discussion or making useless laws.
After the president Moon took office, the laws and legal guidelines are very increased all of the social parts in Korea.
In my experience, harassment and bullying in the workplace cann't be solved by laws.

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Good morning Ms. Lily! Thank you for expressing your thoughts in a written form. Enjoy the day:)
Aki :)
I don't like the way handle to accidents like this of president Moon.
>>> I don't like the way President Moon handle accidents.
Whenever big accidents or incidents occur in Korea, hr always instructed to make relevant laws or revise the provisions.
>>> Whenever there are big accidents or incidents occurring in Korea, He always instructs his subordinates to make relevant laws or revise the provisions.
Utill now, it has been proved that his orders are useless or impractical.
>>> Until now, it has been proven that his orders are useless or impractical.
They around him do only working on the table, having vain discussion or making useless laws.
>>> They go around him, only working on the table, having some vain and useless discussions and laws
After the president Moon took office, the laws and legal guidelines are very increased all of the social parts in Korea.
>>> After President Moon took over office, the laws and legal guidelines increase in all the social parts of Korea.
In my experience, harassment and bullying in the workplace cann't be solved by laws
>>> In my experience, harassment and bullying in the workplace can't be solved by laws alone.

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