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Theme : Make a sentence using the words below.
1. My mom has many colleagues and friends.
2. I don't like facial hair because moreover, when there's facial hair. It doesn't looks neat.
3. He looks fierce but he is so kind.
4. My dad likes carwashing. Also my mom does too.
5. I have many gardening trowels but however Anna doesn't.

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Hi there, Clair!

Here's your corrected homework. I appreciate your sending it. 

Cheers,
Jean~~


                  Theme : Make a sentence using the words below.

1. My mom has many colleagues and friends.
>> OR: My mom has many coworkers and friends. 

2. I don't like facial hair because moreover, when there's facial hair. It doesn't looks neat.
>>  I don't like facial hair. Moreover, when we have facial hair, we don't look neat. ["Moreover" means "in addition" so it doesn't make sense to use it right after "because" when you didn't give any reason after "because". Refer to the sample sentence below. ]

>> I don't like men who have facial hair because it makes them look dirty and unkempt. Moreover, having facial hair is hard to maintain as the person has to keep trimming and making sure that it's clean especially after eating or washing. 

3. He looks fierce but he is so kind.
>> OR: He looks fierce but in fact, he's a kindhearted person. 

4. My dad likes carwashing. Also my mom does too.
>> My dad enjoys going to the car wash. My mom does also. ["Also" and "too" have the same function in this sentence, which means you can't use them at the same time.]

5. I have many gardening trowels but however Anna doesn't.
>>  I have many gardening trowels. However, Anna doesn't. ["But" and "however" have the same function so it's redundant to use them in one sentence.]

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