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I stay in my house and relax.
Because first, the weather is bad, and I'd rather be in home and play games instead of getting the rain and getting ill.
Second, there are a plenty games in our house such as board games, reading books, and watching movies.
It is a bad way to think to play when the weather is bad.
So, I want to be in my house and relax(or play games).

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Hi Pablo! 

Thank you once again for sending your homework. 
Bad weather isn't actually bad. 
There are times that when you hear the sound of the pouring rain, it is quite relaxing. 
It is also a perfect time to bond with your family! 


I  stay in my house and relax. Because first, the weather is bad, 
>> I would rather stay in my house because first, the weather is bad.

and I'd rather be in home and play games instead of getting the rain and getting ill.
>> Second, I can just play games instead of getting ill.

Second, there are a plenty games in our house such as board games, reading books, and watching movies.
>> Lastly. there are a lot of games in our house such as board games. 
>> We can also read books and watch movies. 

It is a bad way to think to play when the weather is bad.
>> It is a bad idea to play outdoors when the weather is bad. 

So, I want to be in my house and relax(or play games.
>> So, I want to be in my house to relax and play games. 
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