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Before Korea became colonized country by Japan, Korea was very weak. At that time Korea paid only attention to philosophy. However, Japan paid lots of attention to industry evolution. Because of this reason, Japan became a very strong country. Like England and France, Japan wanted to have its own colonized country. The best country to make colonized country was Korea, which is weak, and the nearest. However, there were so many cruel acts to Korean. So I think it is wrong.

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Hi, Daniel! Thank you for doing your homework. I'm glad that you know your country's history. Excellent! 

- Teacher Debbie

Before Korea became colonized country by Japan, Korea was very weak. 
>> Before Korea became a colony of Japan, Korea was very weak.

At that time Korea paid only attention to philosophy. 
>> At that time, Korea only paid attention to philosophy.

However, Japan paid lots of attention to industry evolution. 
>> However, Japan paid lots of attention to industrial revolution. 

Because of this reason, Japan became a very strong country.
>> This is a good sentence.

 Like England and France, Japan wanted to have its own colonized country. 
>> This is a good sentence.

The best country to make colonized country was Korea, which is weak, and the nearest.
>> The best country to colonize was Korea, which was weak and the nearest.

 However, there were so many cruel acts to Korean. So I think it is wrong.
>> However, there were so many cruel acts against Koreans, so I think it was wrong.
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