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My favorite shop is lotte world mall. We visit there at least twice month. Because there are close to my home. we can buy vaious items(clothes,shoes, cosmetic and so on). we can enjoy the meal. And Seokchon lake is neared to mall, it is good to walk with my son and husband.

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Good evening Yeon Kyeong. thank you so much for sharing your thoughts about this topic. ^_^
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My favorite shop is Lotte world mall. 
>>> Correct. 
We visit there at least twice month. 
>>> Correct. 
Because there are close to my home. 
>>> This is because it's close to my home. 
We can buy various items (clothes, shoes, cosmetic and so on). 
>>> Correct.
OR
>>> We can buy various items such as clothes, shoes, cosmetic and so on.  
we can enjoy the meal. 
>>> We can also enjoy a meal in there. 
And Seokchon lake is neared to mall, it is good to walk with my son and husband.
>>> Also, Seokchon lake is near the mall so it is a good place to walk with my son and husband.






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