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Both countries can\'t be friends

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In my opinion, the both countries can't be friends right now. It's because they have a different beliefs. And the North Korea's president is very greedy and wants to have all of things. We can't be friends before the president dies or his belief changes by a miracle. However, the South Korean president wants to be friend with that North Korea which has socialism. When the both countries become one before don't solve that belief difference, it can be very big problem.

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In my opinion, the both countries can't be friends right now. 
>> In my opinion, both countries can't be friends right now. 

It's because they have a different beliefs.
>> It's because they have different beliefs.

And the North Korea's president is very greedy and wants to have all of things. 
>> Moreover, North Korea's president is very greedy.

We can't be friends before the president dies or his belief changes by a miracle.
>> We can't be friends unless the president dies or his belief changes by some miracle.

However, the South Korean president wants to be friend with that North Korea which has socialism. 
>> However, the South Korean president wants to be friends with North Korea, which is a socialist. 

When the both countries become one before don't solve that belief difference, it can be very big problem.
>> If both countries reunited before solving its differences, it could be a very big problem.
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