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If the pandemic is over, many people will go back to the way they used to before but they will be more careful about hygiene.
Nowadays, most people are keeping hygiene because of Covid19.
After the pandemic, it will be same as before the pandemic but keeping hygiene will be a habit to a lot of people.
So I think after the pandemic, most people will keep hygiene and I wish it.
Because if we keep hygiene and live more neatly, then we can prevent some deseases like Covid19.

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Hi John:)

I hope so too! People would become more cautious in terms of hygiene. 

PS: Avoid redundancy in your paragraph ^^

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If the pandemic is over, many people will go back to the way they used to before but they will be more careful about hygiene.
>> CORRECT

Nowadays, most people are keeping hygiene because of Covid19.
>> Nowadays, most people are keeping good hygiene because of Covid19.

After the pandemic, it will be same as before the pandemic but keeping hygiene will be a habit to a lot of people.
>> After the pandemic, it will be same as before the pandemic but keeping good hygiene will be a habit to a lot of people.

So I think after the pandemic, most people will keep hygiene and I wish it.
>> I am hoping that most people will keep good hygiene. 

Because if we keep hygiene and live more neatly, then we can prevent some deseases like Covid19.
>> Because if we keep goof hygiene and live more neatly, we can prevent more diseases like COVID-
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