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Q:Which of your family members encourage you most? How do they encourage you?
A:I think I encourage me the most, and my parents encourage me the second.
I know me the best in the world and I live my life so I need to encourage myself, and I encourage me by saying 'It's okay.' in my mind.
Also, my parents mad me born, so they encourage me the second, and they encourage me by saying good things to me.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think I encourage me the most, and my parents encourage me the second.

>> CORRECT!
I know me the best in the world and I live my life so I need to encourage myself, 

>> I know me the best in the world and I'm the one living my life so I need to encourage myself.

and I encourage me by saying 'It's okay.' in my mind.

>> I encourage myself by saying, "It's okay", in my mind.
Also, my parents mad me born, so they encourage me the second, 

>> Also, my parents gave birth to me, so they encourage me the second.

and they encourage me by saying good things to me.

>> They encourage me by saying good things to me.

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