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What is your proudest accomplishment so far this year?

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I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is that I met my greatest friends.
I was really worried about my new friends.
But I came in my class and I met my new friends.
They were very suitable to me and I think I am happy with my friends.
We play together and if there are some problems, we figure them our together.
So I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is that I met my friends.

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Hi John:)

Friends really are a big part of our lives. They are the usual people we hang out with. Choosing our friends is very vital in our lives and I think you made the right choice. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is that I met my greatest friends.
>> I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is meeting my greatest friends.

I was really worried about my new friends.
>> CORRECT

But I came in my class and I met my new friends.
>> But the moment I came in our class, I met them. 

They were very suitable to me and I think I am happy with my friends.
>> They are very suitable for me and I am very happy with them. 

We play together and if there are some problems, we figure them our together.
>> We play together and if there are some problems, we figure them out together.

So I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is that I met my friends.
>> So that is why I think my proudest accomplishment this year is meeting my friends. 

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