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Who do you think is the greatest inventor of all time? Explain your answer.

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In my opinion, the greatest inventor of all time is John William Mauchly.
He invented a very useful tool in our lives, it is a computer.
He invented a computer with Presper Eckert Jr. and nowadays, we are using computers.
It can save a lot of data with 1 and 0.
And we can search many kinds of data in the Internet by using a computer.
So in my opinion, the greatest inventor of all time is John William Mauchly and Presper Eckert Jr.

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Hi John:)

That is indeed true. Computers play a vital role in our lives. A lot of things depend on it so we really have to thank these inventors you have mentioned. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my opinion, the greatest inventor of all time is John William Mauchly.
>> CORRECT

He invented a very useful tool in our lives, it is a computer.
>>He invented a very useful device for us which is a computer. 
 
He invented a computer with Presper Eckert Jr. and nowadays, we are using computers.
>> He invented it with Presper Eckert Jr. and until now, we are using it.

It can save a lot of data with 1 and 0.
>> CORRECT

And we can search many kinds of data in the Internet by using a computer.
>> We can search a lot of data through the internet using it. 

So in my opinion, the greatest inventor of all time is John William Mauchly and Presper Eckert Jr.
>> So in my opinion, the greatest inventors of all time are John William Mauchly and Presper Eckert Jr.

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