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Some people say that \"money makes the world go around.\" Do you agree? Why or why not?

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There are two sides to Money; bad and good effects. To live a life, money is a must, and also money can be a monster. To gain social services and goods for life, we use money as means. It means we cannot get anything without money. When we buy and sell using money as means, we struggle to get money. It leads to making social nets, makes the world go around. For example, farmers produce crops and then sell them to buy the TV. Technicians make TV to buy products and retailers sell them to save money at the bank for the future. Likewise, social activities are interconnected, and money is like oil to circulate the net. In contrast, when we share the money equally, we are satisfied with our possession, but we are allowed to have more, we try to have as many as possible. In this case, money is changed into a monster because we forget for a moment that humans value over money. That¡¯s why we need to be wise and altruistic in terms of money.

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Hi, Miss Jung!
WOW! I'm pretty amazed by this thought. You are indeed right!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and answering the question.
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There are two sides to Money; bad and good effects. 
>> Correct! 
To live a life, money is a must, and also money can be a monster. 
>> Correct! 
To gain social services and goods for life, we use money as means. 
>> Correct! 
It means we cannot get anything without money. 
>> Correct! 
When we buy and sell using money as means, we struggle to get money. 
>> Correct! 
It leads to making social nets, makes the world go around.
>> Correct!  
For example, farmers produce crops and then sell them to buy the TV. 
>> Correct! 
Technicians make TV to buy products and retailers sell them to save money at the bank for the future.
>> Correct! 
Likewise, social activities are interconnected, and money is like oil to circulate the net. 
>> Correct! 
In contrast, when we share the money equally, we are satisfied with our possession, but we are allowed to have more, we try to have as many as possible. 
>> Correct! 
In this case, money is changed into a monster because we forget for a moment that humans value over money. 
>> Correct! 
That¡¯s why we need to be wise and altruistic in terms of money.
>> Correct! 
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