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If you could turn back time, would you want to study the way children study today?

--> Franckly with you, I can not imagine that I study the way children study today. As I always studied definately by myself, I prefer studying the way that I am organizing alone. The current Korean education system seems to be a bad result of parents' impatience.

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Hello there Bo Im!

If we studied the way children today, could you imagine how we would be performing with our jobs? Maybe we would be super achievers as we had less opportunity to have all the academies before.

I agree with you, it is difficult to imagine how children today cope with all the information they need to absorb. So, they need our comfort and support.

Thank you as always for your sensible answer. Please review my suggestions here below and if you have a question, do not hesitate to ask it in class.

See you in a few hours!

-T. Donna =)

Franckly with you, I can not imagine that I study the way children study today. 
>> Frankly with you, I can not imagine studying the way children study today. 
Or: To be frank with you, I can not imagine studying the way children do today. 

As I always studied definately by myself, I prefer studying the way that I am organizing alone. 
>> As I always studied definitely by myself as I prefer studying the way I am organizing information alone. 

The current Korean education system seems to be a bad result of parents' impatience.
>> Correct!
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