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If you had money to spare, what would you buy or invest in? Explain why.

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If I have money to spare, I want to invest in South Korea science.
Of course many people are investing to a lot of kinds of science parts.
But most people are investing in the science parts about industry.
They think investing to a pure science is dangerous because we don't know that it will make a benefit to us or a damage.
But I think a pure science has to be developed for our future, so I wnat to invest in South Korea pure science.

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Hi John:)

Wow, that's very critical of you to think of. Your answer is very reasonable. Your country would benefit a lot from you if so. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I have money to spare, I want to invest in South Korea science.
>>If I have money to spare, I want to invest in South Korea's modern science.

Of course many people are investing to a lot of kinds of science parts.
>>  Of course a lot of people are already investing on it. 

But most people are investing in the science parts about industry.
>> But most of them are only investing the industry part of Science. 

They think investing to a pure science is dangerous because we don't know that it will make a benefit to us or a damage.
>> They think that investing on pure Science is dangerous because there is no assurance whether is it going to be a success or not. 

But I think a pure science has to be developed for our future, so I wnat to invest in South Korea pure science.
>>But I think a pure science has to be developed for our future that's why I want to invest on it. 
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