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Why cleaning wardrobe is important

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I think cleaning wardrobe is very important.
That is because when wardrobe is dirty, the clothes are dirty too. And the clothes are important with life.
My second reason is when the wardrobe is dirty, I'm hate to see the wardrobe.
My third reason is we can many things to insert in wardrobe.
Finally, when the wardrobe is broken, we can't find place to put clothes.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you for doing your homework. I can say that you did well in terms of spelling.  Remember all the corrections to help you improve.

- Teacher Debbie

I think cleaning wardrobe is very important.
>> I think cleaning wardrobes is very important.

That is because when wardrobe is dirty, the clothes are dirty too. 
And the clothes are important with life.
>> That is because when a wardrobe is dirty, clothes get dirty, and clothes are important in our lives.

My second reason is when the wardrobe is dirty, I'm hate to see the wardrobe.
>> I hate seeing dirty wardrobes.

My third reason is we can many things to insert in wardrobe.
>> In addition, if a wardrobe is organized, we can put many things in it.

Finally, when the wardrobe is broken, we can't find place to put clothes.
>>  If it's broken, we can't find another place to put our clothes.
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