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The meaning of Having children to me.

작성자: 박*협
2021-11-26 422

회원님의 영작문

I had a child a year after I got married. It would have been nice if the honeymoon was a little longer, but I always wanted to have a child.
It was so tired and difficult that I didn't know how I lived for 100 days after I had my first child.
It was also my first time raising a child, so I and my wife were clumsy and difficult. My parents were also far away, so I had a hard time physically and mentally because I couldn't get help.
However, by the time the child grew up and had a second child, I had the know-how of it and became more and more relaxed.
However, I was always worried that they would get hurt while raising them, and I had a little other concern about studying and doing more things I wanted to do.
Still, I am so happy that my family is doing their best every moment to make pleasant memories every week.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Evan:)

I think your family is very wonderful. Having children may be hard, but everything is worth it until the end. You guys have a very strong relationship with one another. I hope this won't change even if they are already grown-ups. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I had a child a year after I got married. 
>> CORRECT

It would have been nice if the honeymoon was a little longer, but I always wanted to have a child.
>> CORRECT

It was so tired and difficult that I didn't know how I lived for 100 days after I had my first child.
>> I was so tired. The experience was so difficult. I don't even know how I lived for 100 days after I had my first child. 

It was also my first time raising a child, so I and my wife were clumsy and difficult. 
>> It was also my first time raising a child, so me and my wife were clumsy. 

My parents were also far away, so I had a hard time physically and mentally because I couldn't get help.
>> CORRECT

However, by the time the child grew up and had a second child, I had the know-how of it and became more and more relaxed.
>> However, by the time our child grew up and had  our second child, we already know the basics so we felt more relaxed. 

However, I was always worried that they would get hurt while raising them, and I had a little other concern about studying and doing more things I wanted to do.
>> However, I was always worry that they would get hurt while we were raising them. I had a little concern about studying and doing more things that I wanted to do.

Still, I am so happy that my family is doing their best every moment to make pleasant memories every week.
>> CORRECT
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