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What is the most effective way to save endangered species?

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These days, we have saw that how to live with animals. We can see many animals in some places where people haven't went because of COVID-19. It means if people disappear some places, the animals can live well. In my opinion, all countries make a place for animals as big as 1/10 of country. Developed countries donate money to some countries who makes the place bigger than 1/10 of country, and each country should ban poaching. The earth is for human. We must share the earth with other creature.

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Good afternoon Hwanny! :)
Thank you very much for taking the time to answer this essay question despite your busy schedule. 
I agree that humans should learn how to coexist with animals as well as with other creatures such as insects and plants. 
This is because we live in an ecosystem and if one of them vanishes, it could greatly affect human beings as well. 
Anyhow, I hope you're not too busy today. 
See you later in class. 
~T. Charry

These days, we have saw that how to live with animals. 
>> [DO YOU MEAN]:  These days, we see how animals coexist with humans. 
We can see many animals in some places where people haven't went because of COVID-19. 
>> We can see many animals in some places where people haven't been to because of COVID-19. 
It means if people disappear some places, the animals can live well. 
>> It means if people disappeared in some places, the animals can live well.
In my opinion, all countries make a place for animals and it should be as big as 1/10 of a country's land area. 
>> In my opinion, all countries should set aside a place for animals as big as 1/10 of country.
Developed countries donate money to some countries who makes the place bigger than 1/10 of country, and each country should ban poaching. 
>> Developed countries should donate money to some countries who set aside an isolated place that is bigger than 1/10 of their land areas. In addition, each country should ban poaching.
The earth is for human. 
>> The earth is not only for humans.
We must share the earth with other creature.
>> We must share the earth with other creatures.
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