¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Do humans have the right to hunt and kill animals? Why do you say so?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ¼±*
2021-11-30 415

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Yes, I think so. From the bible, God allows us to be free of eating anything other than one fruit in the middle of the garden. That¡¯s why we humans survive over history from hunters-gathers to technological societies. Have you heard food chain? We live in systematic structures which looks like a pyramid. It means the highest one has the most power to control the system, and it is invincible in the food chain. If we let animals coexist in the same stage as us, animals can conquer us and take over our place in the food chain. It leads to them having the right to kill and hunt humans.
Though we don¡¯t eat animal meats, we neuter animals to reduce the number of animals. In this case, do we need to ask animals whether they would like to be neutered or not? Nobody doesn¡¯t do that. We take the animals to the vet and let animals be neutered. I think animals cannot be humans, so we don¡¯t need to treat animals as human beings. Animals are animals.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi, Sun Jung!  Thank you for doing your homework.  You have answered the question appropriately.  Remember to use pronouns to replace nouns in your sentences though.


- Debbie


Yes, I think so. 
>>  This is a good sentence.

From the bible, God allows us to be free of eating anything other than one fruit in the middle of the garden. 
>> In the Bible, God allows us to eat freely other than the fruit in the middle of the garden.

That¡¯s why we humans survive over history from hunters-gathers to technological societies.
>> That's why we, humans, evolved from being hunter-gatherers to builders of technological societies.

Have you heard food chain? 
>> Have you heard of a food chain?

We live in systematic structures which looks like a pyramid.
>>  We live in a systematic structure that looks like a pyramid.

It means the highest one has the most power to control the system, and it is invincible in the food chain.
>> The one on top has the most power to control the system and is invincible in the food chain.

If we let animals coexist in the same stage as us, animals can conquer us and take over our place in the food chain. 
>> If we let animals coexist in the same stage, they could conquer us and take over our place in the food chain. 

It leads to them having the right to kill and hunt humans.
>> They could hunt and kill humans.

Though we don¡¯t eat animal meats, we neuter animals to reduce the number of animals. 
>> Though we don¡¯t eat meat, we neuter animals to reduce their number.

In this case, do we need to ask animals whether they would like to be neutered or not?
>> In this case, do we need to ask them whether they would like to be neutered or not?

 Nobody doesn¡¯t do that. 
>> Nobody does that.

We take the animals to the vet and let animals be neutered.
>> We take them to a vet and let them be neutered.

 I think animals cannot be humans, so we don¡¯t need to treat animals as human beings. 
>> I think animals cannot be humans, so we don't need to treat them as human beings.

Animals are animals.
>>  This is a good sentence.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
115205 homework ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 2
115204 Are you willing to work overtime? ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 410
115203 What is your lifelong dream? why? À±*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 2
115202 What are your New Year\'s resolutions. ¹é*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 1175
115201 What are you looking forward to the most this new year? Ȳ*º° ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 1648
115200 my introduce ÀÌ*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 4
115199 About Han river park ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 428
115198 What can you get from listening to the radio? Àü*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 450
115197 Who is your favorite cartoon character? Àü*¼± ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 457
115196 What new thing would you like to try this year? ¹Ú*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 456
115195 I received my christmas present!!! ¿À*°á ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 312
115194 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 639
115193 Homework ÀÌ*¼± ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 1
115192 My Homework °­*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 388
115191 Homework ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 479
115190 Homework ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 552
115189 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 0
115188 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 0
115187 What is a good friend? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 411
115186 What do you usually wish for during your birthday? ·ù*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-03 500

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04