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Animals can be friends with people.

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In my opinion, animals can be friends with people, just it is hard to be friends with people. When people say dogs 'I'm so sad', then that people's dogs can encourage them by like skin ship. I think serious friends can encourage us. So, like the dogs that I said, animals can be friends with people.

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Hello, Daniel! Thank you for doing your homework. However, you have to be careful with sentence construction and word usage please. 

- Teacher Debbie

In my opinion, animals can be friends with people, just it is hard to be friends with people. 
>> In my opinion, animals can be friends with people just like how people become friends with others.

When people say dogs 'I'm so sad', then that people's dogs can encourage them by like skin ship. 
>> When people tell their dogs, "I'm so sad" then their dogs can comfort them like a family or a friend.

I think serious friends can encourage us. 
>> I think good friends can comfort us.

So, like the dogs that I said, animals can be friends with people.
>> Therefore, dogs and other animals can be friends with people.
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