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It should be criticized to advertising alcohol by underage idols.

Whenever I watch such as advertisements, I feel into deplorable.

Underage idols and business owners with advertisers only pursue to make money.

The scene of advertisemnet like this article is very shocking because her posture and dress are too sexual , vulgar and indecent.

We have lost the ability of our self-restraint in the face of capitalism.

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Good afternoon Ms. Lily! I totally agree with you that young idols must not advertise alcohol because of their influence to the common citizens. Did you know that in the Philippines, young idols are not allowed to advertise alcohol? Have a great day!
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It should be criticized to advertising alcohol by underage idols.
>>> Advertising alcohol by underage idols should be criticized.
Whenever I watch such as advertisements, I feel into deplorable.
>>> Whenever I watch such advertisements, I tend to deplore.
>>> These advertisements are deplorable for me.
Underage idols and business owners with advertisers only pursue to make money.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> Advertisers, business owners and underage idols pursue to earn money.
The scene of advertisemnet like this article is very shocking because her posture and dress are too sexual , vulgar and indecent.
>>> The scene for the advertisement is very shocking because her posture and dress are too sensual, vulgar and indecent.
We have lost the ability of our self-restraint in the face of capitalism.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> We have lost our sense of self-control due to capitalism.
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