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What do you and your family usually do during Christmas?

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Usually, I receive lego bricks for a Christmas present from my parents.
And I have to make them, and it usually tooks 4~5 hours.
So in Christmas, I usually spend my time for making lego bricks.
But sometimes I got other presents.
In that case, I usually play with my friends.

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Hi John:) 

Building Lego bricks really are one of your hobbies. :) Christmas is really a joyous occasion for everyone. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

Usually, I receive lego bricks for a Christmas present from my parents.
>> Usually, I receive Lego bricks from my parents as a Christmas present. 

And I have to make them, and it usually tooks 4~5 hours.
>> I have to build them afterwards and it usually takes 4-5 hours. 

So in Christmas, I usually spend my time for making lego bricks.
>> So during Christmas, I usually spend time making Lego bricks. 

But sometimes I got other presents.
>> But sometimes I receive other gifts. 

In that case, I usually play with my friends.
>> CORRECT
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