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Christmas:)

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In holiday, my family usually just eat dinner together.
We don't think about it special.
Sometimes, We share to present but it is often not usual.
But christmas is special.
Christmas is...not feels like different some other holiday.
I think because is snow, white christmas is my favorite carol song.
When I was young when the christmas my family together eat the dinner and celebrate just christmas for jesus.
So we went to the church.
But now when we grow up we are so busy, we have so many schedules, we can't together usually.
But we have one heart :)

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Hi Ann:) 

Wow. That is very heartwarming. That is the true essence of Christmas; being with your loved ones. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

In holiday, my family usually just eat dinner together.
>> During this holiday, I usually eat dinner with my family together. 

We don't think about it special.
>> We don't think that this is a special holiday. 

Sometimes, We share to present but it is often not usual.
>> Sometimes, we share presents to each other but it's not that often. 

But christmas is special.
>> Although, Christmas is special. 

Christmas is...not feels like different some other holiday.
>> But it is not the same as other holidays here in South Korea. 

I think because is snow, white christmas is my favorite carol song
.
>> I think it's because of the snow. White Christmas is my favorite caroling song. 

When I was young when the christmas my family together eat the dinner and celebrate just christmas for jesus.
>> When I was young, me and my family would eat together and celebrate the birth of Jesus Christ on Christmas day. 

So we went to the church.
>> So we usually go to church. 

But now when we grow up we are so busy, we have so many schedules, we can't together usually.
>> But now that we are grown ups, we are already very busy and have many schedules so we don't gather that much. 

But we have one heart :)
>> Still, we have one heart. 
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