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What is your favorite place in your city and why?

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My favorite place in my city is Kyung-Bok Palace. It is quite beautiful and huge. There are many spots to take pictures. When I visit this place, I feel like a princess who lives in the place. If I have a chance, I would like to go there again.

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Hi Angela:) 

The Kyung-bok Palace is actually a crowd pleaser. A lot of tourists usually go here when they visit South Korea. Foreigners can also have the chance to wear traditional clothes here to complete South Korean trip. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

My favorite place in my city is Kyung-Bok Palace. 
My favorite place in my city is the Kyung-Bok Palace. 

It is quite beautiful and huge. 
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There are many spots to take pictures. 
>> There are many spots to take pictures there. 

When I visit this place, I feel like a princess who lives in the place. 
>> CORRECT

If I have a chance, I would like to go there again.
>> CORRECT

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