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How has technology changed your life?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ye*nhi
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I can say that technology brings numerous outstanding advantages to me such as making my lives safer, more secure, more comfortable. Everything can be done at the tip of the fingertips. Information can be transmitted via the Internet with ease. It allows friends and family overseas to stay connected and I can communicate on the move. The internet is invaluable when it comes to research. However, It also has a lot of disadvantages such as I can become overly dependent on technology. Spending an excessive amount of time engaging in ¡°screen-time¡± activities can cause my eyes to become nearsighted.

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Very well said, Yen Nhi!
You have explained your ideas well~
Keep it up!

- T. Rina

1. I can say that technology brings numerous outstanding advantages to me such as making my lives safer, more secure, more comfortable. 
>> I can say that technology brings numerous outstanding advantages to me such as making my life safer, more secure, more comfortable. 

2. Everything can be done at the tip of the fingertips. 
>> Everything can be done at the tip of our fingers.

3. Information can be transmitted via the Internet with ease. 
>> CORRECT!

4. It allows friends and family overseas to stay connected and I can communicate on the move. 
>> CORRECT!

5. The internet is invaluable when it comes to research. 
>> CORRECT!

6. However, It also has a lot of disadvantages such as I can become overly dependent on technology. 
>> CORRECT!

7. Spending an excessive amount of time engaging in ¡°screen-time¡± activities can cause my eyes to become nearsighted.
>> CORRECT!
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