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If you could have one superpower, what would it be?

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I am a big fan of Marvel Comics. I have watched all series of Marvel movies. There are so many superheros, the Iron Man(IronMan's name is Tony Stark) is the hero that I most love. He is a genius. He can make everything. If I could have one superpower, I would have the Tony Stark's brain. If I were Tony Stark, I will establish a company which The company will make a machine. That machine supply clean energy to people. When we make energy, many type of pollution also are made. Many people already know, how much the earth is polluted, but few people try to refresh it. I also want to refresh the earth, but I don't have enough power now.

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Hi, Hwanny. 
Thank you for writing this beautiful essay. It's really noble of you to wish for a superpower that would help save earth. 
I agree that only few people care and I'm glad that you're one of them. 
With or without superpowers, we should still do our best to help save and preserve our planet because this is the only place that we could live in. 
I hope you're having a great evening. 
See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

I am a big fan of Marvel Comics. 
>> CORRECT!
I have watched all series of Marvel movies. 
>> I have watched all series of the Marvel movies.
There are so many superheros, the Iron Man(IronMan's name is Tony Stark) is the hero that I most love. 
>> There are so many superheroes and Iron Man who's name is Tony Stark, is the hero that I most love.
He is a genius. 
>> CORRECT!
He can make everything. 
>> CORRECT!
If I could have one superpower, I would have the Tony Stark's brain. 
>> If I could have one superpower, I would like to have Tony Stark's brain.
If I were Tony Stark, I will establish a company which The company will make a machine. 
>> If I were Tony Stark, I will establish a company which makes a special machine.
That machine supply clean energy to people. 
>> That machine will supply clean energy to people.
When we make energy, many type of pollution also are made.
>> When we make energy, many types of pollutions are also made. 
Many people already know, how much the earth is polluted, but few people try to refresh it. 
>> Many people already know how much the earth is polluted, but only few people try to preserve it.
I also want to refresh the earth, but I don't have enough power now.
>> I also want to help preserve the earth, but I don't have enough power now.
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