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My favorite city is my hometown ¡®IKSAN¡¯. Here is so cozy and familiar to me. Beside i don¡¯t need to finding the way in here


I don¡¯t believe lucky charms because i think that it is just superstiton. I never had a lucky from it.

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Hi Jin:) 

Your hometown sounds very cozy.

I have the same belief with you. :)

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My favorite city is my hometown ¡®IKSAN¡¯. 
>> My favorite city is my hometown, "Iksan" 

Here is so cozy and familiar to me. 
>> It is so cozy and comfortable here. 

Beside i don¡¯t need to finding the way in here
>> Besides, I don't need to get lost in different ways here. 

I don¡¯t believe lucky charms because i think that it is just superstiton. 
>> I don't believe in lucky charms because I think they are just superstitions. 

I never had a lucky from it.
>> I never had any luck from it. 
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