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My favorite city is my hometown ¡®IKSAN¡¯. Here is so cozy and familiar to me. Beside i don¡¯t need to finding the way in here


I don¡¯t believe lucky charms because i think that it is just superstiton. I never had a lucky from it.

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Hi Jin:) 

Your hometown sounds very cozy.

I have the same belief with you. :)

PS: You need to post your homework separately. One homework per page. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

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My favorite city is my hometown ¡®IKSAN¡¯. 
>> My favorite city is my hometown, "Iksan" 

Here is so cozy and familiar to me. 
>> It is so cozy and comfortable here. 

Beside i don¡¯t need to finding the way in here
>> Besides, I don't need to get lost in different ways here. 

I don¡¯t believe lucky charms because i think that it is just superstiton. 
>> I don't believe in lucky charms because I think they are just superstitions. 

I never had a lucky from it.
>> I never had any luck from it. 
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