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Funeral Sermon 1

작성자: 류*선
2021-12-07 597

회원님의 영작문

We can know that we have eternal life with God. Friends, Heaven is an incredible place.
No more death. No more goodbyes. No more grief. No more sorrow. No more sin. And no more pain.
God is eternal and everlasting. Once we have a relationship with God, we are able to enjoy life for eternity.
This eternity begins here and now. And of course, beyond our death.
It means we all are saved through our Lord, Jesus.
Jesus died on the cross. But he rose again from the grave.
Yes, as followers of Christ, we are able to experience the power of resurrection here and now. And again, beyond our death.
Therefore, today, we firmly believe that Gordon Bucky Newsome is with Jesus Christ where there is No more death. No more goodbyes. No more grief. No more sorrow. No more sin. And no more pain.
Dear friends in Christ, let us trust in God and let us trust his promise for us. Nothing, not a thing, can separate us from God’s love.
Please remember that no matter what, God is with us today.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Han! Most of the sentences you have composed here are already lovely. They are already blessings as they are.-Faith-
We can know that we have eternal life with God. 
>> CORRECT
OR In Christ. we can have an everlasting life. 
Friends, Heaven is an incredible place.
>> CORRECT
No more death. No more goodbyes. No more grief. No more sorrow. No more sin. And no more pain.
>> In Heaven, there is no more death, no more goodbyes, no more grief, no more sorrow, no more sin and no more pain.
God is eternal and everlasting. 
>> CORRECT
OR Remember, God is the Alpha and Omega, the beginning and the end.
Once we have a relationship with God, we are able to enjoy life for eternity.
>> CORRECT
OR Having an intimate relationship with God could give us eternal life.
This eternity begins here and now. 
>> CORRECT
And of course, beyond our death.
>> CORRECT
OR Also, definitely, even after death.
It means we all are saved through our Lord, Jesus.
>> CORRECT
Jesus died on the cross. But he rose again from the grave.
>> Jesus died on the cross but he rose again from the grave.
Yes, as followers of Christ, we are able to experience the power of resurrection here and now. 
>> Yes, as followers of Christ, we are able to experience the power of resurrection here and now. 
And again, beyond our death.
>> CORRECT
Therefore, today, we firmly believe that Gordon Bucky Newsome is with Jesus Christ where there is No more death. No more goodbyes, No more grief. No more sorrow. No more sin. And no more pain.
>> Therefore, today, we firmly believe that Gordon Bucky Newsome is with Jesus Christ where again, there is no more death, no more goodbyes, no more grief, no more sorrow, no more sin and no more pain.
Dear friends in Christ, let us trust in God and let us trust his promise for us. 
>> CORRECT
OR Dear friends in Christ, let us be rooted in God and cherish His precious promise for us. 
Nothing, not a thing, can separate us from God’s love.
>> CORRECT
Please remember that no matter what, God is with us today.
>> CORRECT
OR Please remember that no matter what, God is in our midst.
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