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Do you think people who exercise are happier than those who don¡¯t? Why or why not?

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I think people who exercise are happier.
If people exercise steadily, they are in a good shape.
Good strength makes good condition in life, so people can enjoy more things.
They can keep good condition for longer time, so they can feel more happier for they live.
Also, exercising help to remove the blues.
When I feel gloomy and depressed, I go to the gym. Then, I don't feel gloomy ever and I can have hope.
People can get sense of accomplishment after exercising.
The sense becomes happiness in life.
So I really recommend people to exercise.
However, If people who exercise start to care the meals and foods, they may be less happy than the people who don't care the foods.
Many of unhealthy food are delicious. Eating delicious makes happiness.

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Hello Kang!
I am so glad you completed your homework.  Take this opportunity to accomplish your homework because you might be so busy when you go back to study abroad.  Enjoy your night! :)

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I think people who exercise are happier.
>>Correct. 
If people exercise steadily, they are in a good shape.
>>Correct.
Good strength makes good condition in life, so people can enjoy more things.
>>Correct.
They can keep good condition for longer time, so they can feel more happier for they live.
>>They can keep the good condition for a longer time, so they can feel much happier. 
Also, exercising help to remove the blues.
>>Also, exercising helps take the blues away. 
When I feel gloomy and depressed, I go to the gym. 
>>Correct.
Then, I don't feel gloomy ever and I can have hope.
>>Correct.
People can get sense of accomplishment after exercising.
>>People can get a sense of accomplishment after exercising. 
The sense becomes happiness in life.
>>That feeling becomes happiness in life. 
So I really recommend people to exercise.
>>Correct.
However, If people who exercise start to care the meals and foods, they may be less happy than the people who don't care the foods.
>>However, if people who exercise start to care about the meals and food they consume, they may be less happy than those who don't care about their food. 
Many of unhealthy food are delicious. 
>>Many unhealthy foods are delicious. 
Eating delicious makes happiness.
>>Eating delicious food leads to a life full of satisfaction and good health. 

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