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Is peer pressure beneficial or harmful?

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When someone does bad things, doing along is very difficult. Doing bad things is more excited than doing good things. When people do bad things, they can be united. In my opinion, peer pressure is harmful. If I joined a group which made up of good people, they would give good influence. If not, a problem is made at that case. When I do Military service, some guys who were upper rank than me tried to get me to smoke. When people do bad things together, they feel catharsis.

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Hi, Hwanny!
Thank you for writing an essay about our topic and being honest about your opinions. 
I think the effect of peer pressure depends on the kind of friends that you have. 
If you have bad friends, then peer pressure is by no means beneficial. 
Anyhow, I hope you're doing great. 
See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

When someone does bad things, doing along is very difficult. 
>> When someone does bad things, going along with it is very difficult.
Doing bad things is more excited than doing good things.
>> Doing bad things is more exciting than doing good things.
When people do bad things, they can be united. 
>> CORRECT!
In my opinion, peer pressure is harmful. 
>> CORRECT!
If I joined a group which made up of good people, they would give good influence. 
>> If I join a group which consists of good people, they would give good influence to me.
If not, a problem is made at that case. 
>> If not, a problem will arise in that case. 
When I do Military service, some guys who were upper rank than me tried to get me to smoke. 
>> When I was doing my Military service, some guys who were in the upper ranks tried to get me to smoke.
When people do bad things together, they feel catharsis.
>> CORRECT!

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