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Why it is important to have a permission

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I think having permission is important.
That is because when we don't have permission and borrow people's stuff, we can be misunderstood.
My second reason is when we don't have permission, we can make people angry.
My third reason is we can easy to have permission.
Finally, when we have permission, we can have compliment

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Hi, Joey!  Thank you for doing your homework. You were able to use good expressions in your homework.  Awesome!

- Teacher Debbie


I think having permission is important.
>> This is a good sentence.

That is because when we don't have permission and borrow people's stuff, we can be misunderstood.
>> That is because when we don't have permission and get people's stuff, we can be misunderstood.

My second reason is when we don't have permission, we can make people angry.
>> This is a good sentence.

My third reason is we can easy to have permission.
>> My third reason is we can easy borrow things if we have permission.

Finally, when we have permission, we can have compliment
>> Finally, when we have permission, we can get compliments.
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