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Which habit do you think is the most important for parents to set as an example for their children?

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First things first, we shouldn't scold our children.
Getting scolded is not a happy thing to most children.
They don't want to be scolded, they want their parents' love and attention.
So I think we shouldn't scold our children.
We may think that it is one of the lessons, but our children don't.

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Hi John:) 

I think instead of scolding, we should talk to our children in a very calm way and explain what they did wrong so that they can fully understand and reflect on it. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

First things first, we shouldn't scold our children.
>>> CORRECT

Getting scolded is not a happy thing to most children.
>> Getting scolded by parents is not a good experience for children. 

They don't want to be scolded, they want their parents' love and attention.
>> They don't want to be scolded. They want their parents' love and attention.

So I think we shouldn't scold our children.
>> CORRECT

We may think that it is one of the lessons, but our children don't.
>> CORRECT
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