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If Corona is finished, I want to travel Vladivostok in Russia. There are many reason I want to visit there. But If I have to choose only one, I would like to say these three things. First, I heard there are many delicious dessert in Vladivostok. My friends visited there before the Corona. She says there are many kind of the dessert you like. For instance, You can enjoy a chocolate cake, sweet bread and Gelato so on. I like sweet dessert. Second, Vladivostok is similar to Europe. I will be able to experience mood of Europe to more cheaper price. Europe is so far and expensive to university student like me. Vladivostok is as wonderful as Europe. Third, Vladivostok has beautiful view. There are a lot of buildings that look like palaces. It feels like a princess and a prince are living there. Additionally, I love to take a picture. If I take a picture in front of beautiful building, I feel good. Because of these three reason, I want to travel Vladivostok in Russia

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Hi, Sally!

Oh, that's good to know that you already have a prospect place to visit soon. I hope you can go there someday when it's already safe.

Thank you for sharing!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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If Corona is finished, I want to travel Vladivostok in Russia.
>> Correct! or If this pandemic is over, I want to travel Vladivostok in Russia.
There are many reason I want to visit there. 
>> There are many reasons I want to visit there. 
But If I have to choose only one, I would like to say these three things. 
>> Correct! 
First, I heard there are many delicious dessert in Vladivostok. 
>> First, I heard there are many delicious desserts in Vladivostok. 
My friends visited there before the Corona. 
>> Correct! or My friends visited there before the pandemic.
She says there are many kind of the dessert you like. 
>>She says there are many kinds of the dessert you like. 
For instance, You can enjoy a chocolate cake, sweet bread and Gelato so on. 
>> For instance, You can enjoy a chocolate cake, sweet bread, Gelato and so on. 
I like sweet dessert.
>> Correct! 
Second, Vladivostok is similar to Europe. 
>> Correct! 
I will be able to experience mood of Europe to more cheaper price. 
>> I will be able to experience the mood of Europe to more cheaper price. 
Europe is so far and expensive to university student like me. 
>> Correct! 
Vladivostok is as wonderful as Europe.
>> Correct!
Third, Vladivostok has beautiful view. 
>> Third, Vladivostok has a beautiful view. 
There are a lot of buildings that look like palaces. 
>> There are a lot of buildings that looks like palaces. 
It feels like a princess and a prince are living there. 
>> Correct! 
Additionally, I love to take a picture. 
>> Correct! 
If I take a picture in front of beautiful building, I feel good. 
>>If I take a picture in front of the beautiful building, I feel good.
Because of these three reason, I want to travel Vladivostok in Russia
>> Because of these three reasons, I want to travel Vladivostok in Russia


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