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In south korea high school culture

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In South Korea high school, we have a yaja culture.
Yaja mean like, when the finished the real class. But students can't go back to home.
Just stay school and do it study untill the night at 10pm.
It's call name is yaja.
In my personal opinion, really really bad culture.
Anyway, students who like studying and think it's important they gonna do they self.

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Hi Ann:) 

Wow, that doesn't sound good. Here, students already go home before 6pm.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

In South Korea high school, we have a yaja culture.
>> In South Korea's high school, we have the "Yaja" culture. 

Yaja mean like, when the finished the real class. But students can't go back to home.
>> "Yaja" mean s that when the class in school is finishes, student's will not go home yet. 

Just stay school and do it study untill the night at 10pm.
>> They just stay in school until 10 pm. 

It's call name is yaja.
>> It is called "Yaja". 

In my personal opinion, really really bad culture.
>> In my personal opinion, it is a bad culture. 

Anyway, students who like studying and think it's important they gonna do they self.
>> Anyway, students who like studying and think it's important can do it for themselves. 

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