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I have never worked abroad. However, according to people working abroad, working in developing countries in Asia allowed them to live more luxurious lives than in Korea. In developing or underdeveloped countries, housing prices and living expenses are cheaper than in korea, and the workers receive about 1.5 times more salary, so overseas workers are seems to be highly satisfied.

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I have never worked abroad. 
>> I have never worked abroad. 

However, according to people working abroad, working in developing countries in Asia allowed them to live more luxurious lives than in Korea. 
>>However, according to the people working abroad, working in developing countries in Asia allows them to live more luxurious lives than in Korea.

In developing or underdeveloped countries, housing prices and living expenses are cheaper than in korea, and the workers receive about 1.5 times more salary, so overseas workers are seems to be highly satisfied.
>> Housing prices and living expenses in developing or underdeveloped countries are cheaper than in Korea, and the workers receive about 1.5 times more salary, so overseas workers are seems to be highly satisfied.
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