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One of my expectation in this school is that i can interact with various of languages. As you know, i really think that speaking language makes my life quality much more higher. And also when i listen English, or when i speak with English, i feel very comfortable and relaxed. I don't know the accurate reason but^^ anyway, when i enter that school i can get more chances to speak English with others. I think that's the reason why i think this school will perfectly fits to me!!

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One of my expectation in this school is that i can interact with various of languages. 
>> One of my expectation in this school is that I can interact with (people/ students) of various languages. 

As you know, i really think that speaking language makes my life quality much more higher. 
>> As you know, I really think that speaking a language makes my life's quality much higher. 

And also when i listen English, or when i speak with English, i feel very comfortable and relaxed. 
>> And also, when I listen to English or when I speak in English, I feel very comfortable and relaxed. 

I don't know the accurate reason but^^ anyway, when i enter that school i can get more chances to speak English with others. 
>> Correct!
Or: I don't know the accurate reason but anyway, when I enter that school, I can get more chances to speak English with others. 

I think that's the reason why i think this school will perfectly fits to me!!
>> I think that's the reason why I think this school will perfectly fit to me!
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