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Do you think birthdays are important? Why or why not?

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In my opinion, birthdays are important.
Because in a birthday, there is many meanings about a birth.
And also a lot of people are thinking that birthdays are important to them.
And I am one of the people so I also think that birthdays are important.
Also celebrating a birthday is one of the ways to remeber our parents.
Thanks for our parents, we are existing in this world.
That's why celebreating a birthday can be one of the ways to remeber our parents.
So I think all the birthdays are important to everyone.

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Hi John:) 

Birthdays are great. It's a day meant to celebrate your existence in this world. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

In my opinion, birthdays are important.
>> CORRECT

Because in a birthday, there is many meanings about a birth.
>> There are many traditional things to do during a person's birthday. 

And also a lot of people are thinking that birthdays are important to them.
>> Also, a lot of people are thinking that birthdays are important to them.. 

And I am one of the people so I also think that birthdays are important.
>> I am one of those people. 

Also celebrating a birthday is one of the ways to remeber our parents.
>> This is also another way for us to remember our parents. 

Thanks for our parents, we are existing in this world.
>> We should thank them because they are the reason why we exist in this world. 

That's why celebreating a birthday can be one of the ways to remeber our parents.
>> This is the reason why we can appreciate them more. 

So I think all the birthdays are important to everyone.
>> So, I think all the birthdays are important to everyone.

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