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I think reading books habits are very important to children.
These days, there are so many books, including electronic books.
I like electronic books, but I think it's important to see books printed on paper.
Of course, it can be a fairy tale book, a science magazine, or a textbook.
By reading books, we can sit down and concentrate in the right position.
It can give myself or our family time to be silent for a while.
These days, we spend too much time looking at smartphones, so I think this training is essential for young children.
I also try to give my children a lot of reading time, but they don't seem to like books.
I also want to read books, but I haven't read books properly for a long time due to various excuses.

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Hi Evan:) 

That is a good habit to teach children. It can be beneficial for them. It can promote peace and intelligence. I hope your kids would learn to love reading. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

I think reading books habits are very important to children.
>> I think reading habits are very important to children. 

These days, there are so many books, including electronic books.
>> CORRECT

I like electronic books, but I think it's important to see books printed on paper.
>> CORRECT

Of course, it can be a fairy tale book, a science magazine, or a textbook.
>> CORRECT

By reading books, we can sit down and concentrate in the right position.
>>By reading books, we can sit down and concentrate while on the right position.

It can give myself or our family time to be silent for a while.
>> CORRECT

These days, we spend too much time looking at smartphones, so I think this training is essential for young children.
>> CORRECT

I also try to give my children a lot of reading time, but they don't seem to like books.
>> CORRECT

I also want to read books, but I haven't read books properly for a long time due to various excuses.
>> CORRECT
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