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What do you think of single adults adopting kids?

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I think that both single adults and orphans are suffering from loneliness, and need someone to love them. So families made up of these lonely people can comfort each other by forming a family. I think the more people who don't have a family to rely on, the bigger their loneliness can grow and become various complaints toward society. And It can be another social problems that we tackle down. In this respect, government should try to reduce the number of lonely people in society.

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Hi, Steve! Thank you for answering your homework. However, you have to work more on sentence construction.

- Debbie

I think that both single adults and orphans are suffering from loneliness, and need someone to love them. 
>> I think that both single adults and orphans are suffering from loneliness and need someone to love them

So families made up of these lonely people can comfort each other by forming a family.
>> Therefore, they comfort each other by forming a family. 

I think the more people who don't have a family to rely on, the bigger their loneliness can grow and become various complaints toward society.
>> I think when people don't have families to rely on, their loneliness can grow and become menaces to society.
 
And It can be another social problems that we tackle down. 
>> It can be another social problem that needs to be tackled by governments.

In this respect, government should try to reduce the number of lonely people in society.
>> In this respect, governments should try to reduce the number of lonely people.

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