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What is the implication of having an aging population?

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The increase in an aging population means that the number of people young people need to support increases, although there are more and more retirees to work after retirement.
Regarding the surge of the elderly people, we shouldn't leave out low birthrate in Korea.
Now low fertility rate is as burdensome for Korean finance as fast aging. If young people don't want to give birht with the burden to support aging population, it will lead to a vicious cycle.
I believe the increase in a person's lifespan will only be a blessing when we secure proper birthrate rate.
Therefore, the current government will have to increase the fertility rate at all costs before it is too late

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The increase in an aging population means that the number of people young people need to support increases, although there are more and more retirees to work after retirement.
>> The surge in the aging population means that the number of people the young citizens need to support increases, although there are more and more retirees who work after retirement.

Regarding the surge of the elderly people, we shouldn't leave out low birthrate in Korea.
>> Besides the surge of the elderly, we shouldn't leave out the low birthrate in Korea.

Now low fertility rate is as burdensome for Korean finance as fast aging.
>> Now the low fertility rate is as burdensome as the fast-aging population.

If young people don't want to give birht with the burden to support aging population, it will lead to a vicious cycle.
>>If young people, with the burden to support the aging population, don't want to give birth  it will lead to a vicious cycle.

I believe the increase in a person's lifespan will only be a blessing when we secure proper birthrate rate.
>> I believe the increase in a person's lifespan will only be a blessing when we secure a proper birthrate

Therefore, the current government will have to increase the fertility rate at all costs before it is too late
>> Therefore, the current government will have to increase the fertility rate at all costs before it is too late.
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