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It is December. Unbelievable!!
Time is so fast and every new years my resolution is same.
This year become better than last year.
2021's my purpose is join in to big company musical, but I can't.
I believe next year I can do it.
But I'm so proud my self everyday everytime:)

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Hi Ann:) 

Those are great achievements! I am very proud of you as well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

It is December. Unbelievable!!
>> CORRECT

Time is so fast and every new years my resolution is same.
>> Time flies so fast and all of my new year's resolutions are the same. 

This year become better than last year.
>> This year ahs become better than last year. 

2021's my purpose is join in to big company musical, but I can't.
>> My purpose this 2021 was to join a big musical company but I didn't. 

I believe next year I can do it.
>> I believe that next year I can do it. 

But I'm so proud my self everyday everytime:)
>> Regardless of that, I am still proud of myself everyday. 
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