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Regrets for my life.

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I don't think I have much regrets in my life.
Sometimes one of our co-workers say getting married is the most regrettable thing, and someone regrets not being good to their parents before they die.
I take responsibility for my choice every moment and try to live a satisfied life.
There is one thing that comes to mind now, and when my daughter was about three years old, she fell on her face while playing in bed and hurt her teeth and mouth severely. I was so worried and scared that growing teeth might have been damaged at a young age.
Fortunately, the hospital's doctor said it was okay, but there is still a slight damage her teeth.
I have a regret that I want to go back to that day and prevent the accident.
My mother repeatedly told me to be careful in my childhood, because of that I have never been seriously injured or went to the hospital.
So sometimes i thaught insurance benefits are wasteful.^^

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Hi Evan:) 

That sounds awful. I feel bad for your daughter. I hope that this won't happen again. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

I don't think I have much regrets in my life.
>> CORRECT

Sometimes one of our co-workers say getting married is the most regrettable thing, and someone regrets not being good to their parents before they die.
>> There was a time when one of our co-workers said that getting married is the most regrettable thing, and someone regret not being good to their parents before they died. 

I take responsibility for my choice every moment and try to live a satisfied life.
>> I take responsibility for my choices all the time to live a satisfying life. 

There is one thing that comes to mind now, and when my daughter was about three years old, she fell on her face while playing in bed and hurt her teeth and mouth severely. 
>> There is one thing that came to mind now. It is when my daughter was about three years old, she fell on her face while playing on the bed and hurt her teeth and mouth severely. 

I was so worried and scared that growing teeth might have been damaged at a young age.
>> I was so worried and scared that her growing teeth might have been damaged at a young age.

Fortunately, the hospital's doctor said it was okay, but there is still a slight damage her teeth.
>> Fortunately, the hospital's doctor said it was okay, but there is still a slight damage on her teeth.

I have a regret that I want to go back to that day and prevent the accident.
>> I regret that day. I wish I can go back in time to prevent that accident. 

My mother repeatedly told me to be careful in my childhood, because of that I have never been seriously injured or went to the hospital.
>> My mother repeatedly told me to be careful during my childhood and because of that ,I have never been seriously injured or went to the hospital.


So sometimes i thaught insurance benefits are wasteful.^^
>> So sometimes It think that insurance benefits are wasteful. ^^
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