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All drugs should be legalized. Why do you think so? I think that all drugs should be prohibit without using medicines.
It is so dangerous that all countries are manage to use very carefully. I often heard about people in the news that related to using drugs.
They occur many serious problem related to accidents. That\'s why they tend to be aggressive.
What if children in our country could buy drugs easily? It would be big problem our future.

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Dear Rachel,

Thank you for diligently answering the homework I prepared. You expressed your opinions well! I appreciate the hard work. :)

Keep it up! ^^
-Teacher Violet

I think that all drugs should be prohibit without using medicines.
>>I think that all drugs should be prohibited if not used as medicine.
OR >> I think that all drugs should be prohibited if not used medically.

It is so dangerous that all countries are manage to use very carefully.
>> It is so dangerous that all countries are managing it to be used carefully.

I often heard about people in the news that related to using drugs.
>> I often heard about people on the news who are related to drug use.

They occur many serious problem related to accidents. 
>> They make many serious problems related to accidents.

That's why they tend to be aggressive.
>> CORRECT!

What if children in our country could buy drugs easily?
>> CORRECT!

 It would be big problem our future.
>> It would be a big problem for our future.
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