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Theme : [ESSAY] Write about a mythology story that you know.
There is a mythology named "Pandora's Box".

'Pandora' is the world's first women.
A blacksmith made her a box.
But Zeus, who told the blacksmith to make the box, told Pandora to not open the box.
But Pandora opened the box and inside the box, there were blue, glummy, sadness, painfull...esc.
So, the unhappyful emotions appeared.
-Greek Mythology-

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                   Theme : [ESSAY] Write about a mythology story that you know.


There is a mythology named "Pandora's Box".
>> There's an artifact named "Pandora's Box" in Greek mythology. 

'Pandora' is the world's first women.
>> 'Pandora' is the world's first woman.

A blacksmith made her a box.
>> CORRECT~~

But Zeus, who told the blacksmith to make the box, told Pandora to not open the box.
>> But Zeus, who ordered the blacksmith to make the box, told Pandora to not open it.

But Pandora opened the box and inside the box, there were blue, glummy, sadness, painfull...esc. [Note the spelling of "gloomy", "painful", and "etc."]
>> However, Pandora opened the box, and inside, there were sickness, death, sadness, pain...etc.

So, the unhappyful emotions appeared.
>> So, all kinds of misery and evil appeared. 

-Greek Mythology-

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