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I want to change my curtain.

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I want change my room curtain.
Korea is four season country.
And now it's December, very cold outside.
My room cutain so thin, and then my room temperature is so low.
And my favorite color is white, I want change my room curtain like white thick curtain.
Now my curtain color is so dark green, atmosphere like too dark:(

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Hi Ann :) 

Oh, you can easily change that. I think changing it to white can really brighten up your room. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise
I want change my room curtain.
>> I want change my room's curtain.

Korea is four season country.
>> South Korea has four seasons. 

And now it's December, very cold outside.
>> Since it is December, it is very cold outside. 

My room cutain so thin, and then my room temperature is so low.
>> My room curtain so thin, and my room's temperature is so low.

And my favorite color is white, I want change my room curtain like white thick curtain.
>> My favorite color is also white so I want to change my curtain to a thick white curtain. 

Now my curtain color is so dark green, atmosphere like too dark:(
>> Now, my curtain is dark green which makes my room too dark.
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