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What is my favorite computer game

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My favorite computer game is League of legend.
That is because it has many contents.
My second reason is that game is very fun.
My third reason is that games don't have to sage.
Finally, it is easy to move character.

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Hello, Joey! Thank you for doing your homework. You answered the question correctly. Fantastic! 

Please take note of the corrections. 

- Teacher Debbie

My favorite computer game is League of legend.
>> My favorite computer game is League of Legends.

That is because it has many contents.
>> This is a good sentence.

My second reason is that game is very fun.
>> My second reason is that it is enjoyable.

My third reason is that games don't have to sage.
>> I'm sorry. What do you mean by this?

Finally, it is easy to move character.
>> Finally, it is easy to move the characters.
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