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What do you think should the government of South Korea do with the rising COVID-19 cases nowadays?

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Because of the rising Covid19 cases, South Korea goverment try to make most people vaccinated.
In South Korea, we can choose be vaccinated or not vaccinated.
But the goverment is making that we can only go particular places if we are not vaccinated.
But some people can be dangerous because of the vaccine.
So I think the goverment has to change this thing.
So Everyone can go any places.

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Hi John:) 

It saddens me to hear that the number of COVID-19 patients in South Korea is continuously increasing. We also experienced the same thing. Hopefully, the government will think of an effective way to control the outbreak. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise
Because of the rising Covid19 cases, South Korea goverment try to make most people vaccinated.
>> Because of the rising Covid19 cases, South Korea's government is trying get most people vaccinated. 

In South Korea, we can choose be vaccinated or not vaccinated.
>> In South Korea, we can choose either to be be vaccinated or not vaccinated.

But the goverment is making that we can only go particular places if we are not vaccinated.
>> But the government is stating that we can only go to particular places if we are not vaccinated.

But some people can be dangerous because of the vaccine.
>> Some people are also possible of harm because of the vaccine. 

So I think the goverment has to change this thing.
>> So, I think the government has to change this so everyone can go to different places. 

So Everyone can go any places.
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